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komissar
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well mates - i feel some kind of inspiration these days :)

here is the Chapter VI of "The Kitin Scriptures"
hope you like it ;)

It does not end with a cliffhanger like the previous two nor does it put an end to my tale ;) so enjoy...
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Re: The show must go on :P

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Since the forums are back - like I promised here's Chapter VII of "The Kitin Scriptures"

enjoy :)

PS: As i mentioned before I amnot a native speaker so if any of the native speakers could correct my stylistic and other mistakes I'd be really thankful :)
*hugs all*
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"A fond memory" of the "Order of the Nameless"
Matisian Botanist: "Complete Atlas of Atysian Flora (work in progress)"
Devoted Scholar of the "Zorai pictograms" "Zorai pictographic Signatures on demand"
Author of "The Kitin Scriptures" "The Kitin Scriptures WEBCOMIC!!!"
"Яussians may die - but never give up!"

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The Chapter VIII of "Kitin Scriptures" is out...

This chapter explains what has been done to the half zorai half Kitin scholar Dai Xielu, speaks of the intricacies of inter-genetic surgical operations and mentions "The great Mind" for the very first time.

enjoy :)


PS And no, the "Great Mind" is not Sunce :D
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"A fond memory" of the "Order of the Nameless"
Matisian Botanist: "Complete Atlas of Atysian Flora (work in progress)"
Devoted Scholar of the "Zorai pictograms" "Zorai pictographic Signatures on demand"
Author of "The Kitin Scriptures" "The Kitin Scriptures WEBCOMIC!!!"
"Яussians may die - but never give up!"

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Whoa, becoming ambitious now. These kitin seem much more intelligent than Nevrax ever had them in mind. Looking forward to reading more about how you envisioned them. :)

Lemme guess - "becoming one with the Great mind" was their way of saying "we'll kill you"? :p

Oh, one note though. Be careful with the structuring when, like now, you have a person telling a story about a person telling a story about how he told something. It quickly gets confusing.
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Good job, Komi, love how the plot gets more and more complex and slightly mystical. Don't stop.
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sidusar wrote:Whoa, becoming ambitious now. These kitin seem much more intelligent than Nevrax ever had them in mind.

Lemme guess - "becoming one with the Great mind" was their way of saying "we'll kill you"? :p

Oh, one note though. Be careful with the structuring when, like now, you have a person telling a story about a person telling a story about how he told something. It quickly gets confusing.
Well It's not exactly the Kitin themselves who are so intelligent... But the truth will reveal itself later ;)

Your guess is not quite right - if they kill you - you respawn at the nearest portal... Unless they dissolve your whole body in acid... But that is not what was meant either. This "Great Mind" will be a very important "character" (if I can name him so) later...

Yes I noticed this overcomplexity and made slight corrections. It's a technique widely used in arabian fairy tales - like 1000 and 1 night :) But I shouldn't misuse it I guess ;) I'll try to be more careful - thanks for correction.

To Faa: Thanks :) In fact it will get a lot more complex even :D
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"A fond memory" of the "Order of the Nameless"
Matisian Botanist: "Complete Atlas of Atysian Flora (work in progress)"
Devoted Scholar of the "Zorai pictograms" "Zorai pictographic Signatures on demand"
Author of "The Kitin Scriptures" "The Kitin Scriptures WEBCOMIC!!!"
"Яussians may die - but never give up!"

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yes... no using your powers for evil
*head explodes*

Wonderful story though ;)
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