Should i continue with The Last Tale

[legokid]

I've been writing what i think is a great story.I've written two chapter all ready but i stopped writting.I dont want to write a story that no one likes.Oh and thank you for the two players who did replie.So please i want to know what you think.Im up for idea.

[legokid]

I've been writing what i think is a great story.I've written two chapter all ready but i stopped writting.I dont want to write a story that no one likes.Oh and thank you for the two players who did replie.So please i want to know what you think.Im up for idea.

I talk to some friends about the story and they love it.So ill continue writing.I have another story planned about Jena and chosen ones.So you disregard this post sorry again.

[kibsword]

go for it

[vguerin]

You seem to have a genuine desire to write a good story... you really really have to clean up the spelling, grammer and punctuation if you want folks to read it. I could not make it past the first paragraph...
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[benjouu]

Stories to read are always good

[dazman76]

I also think it's a good story, and I also agree with DT about the grammar/paragraph problems BUT, I also totally appreciate that not everyone's first language is English, and if that's the case here - you've done a great job Writing stories in English cannot be easy if it isn't your first language. It's not just a case of translation, as many people will appreciate.

These comments (and any above) are purely constructive criticism - take them with a light heart as they're intended, and remember the most important comment of them all - your story is very good, keep it up

(OK last comment - as a rule, most of your paragraphs could be broken into 2, at least - make it easier for the reader to digest, and they will surely read to the end Most novels and books have nice bite-size paragraphs - it's not meant to be 'simple', nor is it meant for people with poor reading skills. It's purely to make the reader feel comfortable, and keep them reading all the way.)

[legokid]

You seem to have a genuine desire to write a good story... you really really have to clean up the spelling, grammer and punctuation if you want folks to read it. I could not make it past the first paragraph...
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Ill try and make the next chapter better.But grammer isn't easy when you write Ryzom storys.But I Promise the next chapter will be alot better.