The Last Tale chapter 1

[legokid]

I i've been working on this for a while.Truth is about a week.........This is a tale that i think everyone will like so"May the first part of the tale be told."



Long ago after the Kitten War when the races returned to their new homes. All was was peace but questions flowed around the land on the wind. Was the world is safe. Did kitten return to the deep. Did Jena or the Kami save us? These questions started a great trek to each race. The Tryker wondered about their new home and the other lands.

So the Tryker leader sent six great masters.La’Beka warrior of all weapons.Be’Cona gunner,Le’Sindo a mage that harness the power of Atys.Le’Sinta sister of Le’Sindo can heal many illness with ease.Ga’Lorda master harvester and Sa’Binga master crafter.

They studied the LakeLands and with much fear learned that the kitten still roamed the land. But to great surprise the discovered that the lands were rich with mats. Needing rest they stubbed they found one of the portals the leads to what we know as Winds of Muse. There they found a small camp of people in cloaks and masks. They didn’t know who or what there are. They came closer to the camp when one of them stood in front of them, the Trykers griped their weapons and were ready to fight. The masked man said’ please lower your weapons we are the Karavan the one who save your people. Their families told them of masked people the save them from the kitten. The Karvan gave them a place to sleep and showed them many ways to fight, craft, harvest and use magic. They also showed them how to get to Zoria and that a Karvan camp outside the city will show them how to get to Pyr.The Tryker show them their cities so they can teach their people. Before they entered the jungle the Karvan officer told them ‘Beware the Kami don’t trust them and good luck young Tryker.

Before they left for the new land they set a camp for the night. Every one slept well all except for the mages.Le’Sinta looked over at his sister. He turn over and thought I promised that I would be with you through this journey.Jena if you really exist help me protect my sister. A tear trickled down his cheek, as this happened Le’Sindo was greeted by a strange woman in her dream. The woman had a gorges dress on. A full body suit that was silk white and were the parts came together was a ocean blue silk lines. She walked up to Le’sindo deeded and ran a hand through Le’Sindo purple hair. She said’ your brother has ask me to help protect you two on this long journey. The woman could tell Le’Sindo was afraid so she calmly said I am Jena goddess of Atys and leader of the Karavan.Im here to help you and the others get to the other lands and show them that I still love all races. On all of your armor your people put their symbol wear it with pride. We shall meet again until that time my followers the Karavan will help you on your journey. Now sleep young Tryker you need your rest, goodbye. A few seconds later she awoke she turned to the group they all had a tear on the cheek then she felt one on her face she stumbled over a bag and fall causing everyone to wake up in alarm .But before anyone could say a word the tears rolled down onto their necks where it became a necklace. They looked at each other necklaces and said Jena.It’s a gift from Jena so she can protect us. A moment of silence past then Sa’Binga said we should go back to bed. We can sleep easy now that we know Jena is protecting us. Before they fall asleep they whispered thank you Jena.


Ok the the first chapter i would of started the next but i dont know how you guys will like.So had you guys like.

P.S.tell other about this story i want as many people to review this as possible.

[larwood]

Very nice story Legokid. I'm no scholar but I read your tale, and took the liberty to make a few gramatical, and historical changes. I hope it's helped you some. Take it or leave it. I'm sure there are much better english scholars than me.



Long ago… after the Kitin War, when the races of homin returned to their homelands, Atys was still. Yet questions flowed around the land as whispers on the wind. Is the world safe? Did the kitin return to the deep? Did Jena or Ma-Duk save us? These questions stirred the hearts of homin, with a desire to explore and discover far-distant lands. The homin of Tryker wondered about their home and the other far-away lands.

The leader of the Tryker race selected six great masters to journey to the distant lands of Atys. The homin’s chosen for this heroic expedition included: La’Beka, Master of Weapons; Be’Cona, Elite Gunman; Le’Sindo, Elemental Archmage; Le’Sinta, sister of Le’Sindo, Divine Healer; Ga’Lorda, Master Atys Harvester and Sa’Binga Master Atys Crafter.

They studied the exotic enviornment of the Lakelands and with much fear learned that the kitin still roamed with little restraint. To their great surprise they discovered that the land was rich with precious materials. As they traveled they grew tired and in need of rest. The party stumbled across a portal to the land we know of as the Winds of Muse. There they found a small camp of homin-like beings, each wrapped in dark cloaks with masks covering their faces. They didn’t know who or what they were. They slowly approached the mysterious camp when suddenly one of the hooded figures hovered directly in their path.

The explorers gripped their weapons and were ready to defend themselves against this mysterious being. The masked figure said, “Please lower your weapons we are the Karavan. The ones who will save your people.”

The explorers had been told stories of masked people who would come to save them from the kitin. The Karavan gave them a place to sleep and trained them in the arts of warfare, craft, forage and magic. The Karavan taught the weary explorers of Jena, and her plan to deliver Hominity from the vile kitin. They also showed the explorers the paths to Zorai, and told them that a Karavan camp outside the city of Zora would direct them on how to travel to Pyr, in the land of the Burning Desert. The explorers urged the Karavan to visit all the Tryker cities and teach all their people of the Karavan way.

Before they entered the jungle the Karavan officer warned them, “Beware the Kami, and do not trust them! Farewell, and good luck young Trykers.”

They had not travled far from the Karavan when the expedition decided to make camp for the night. Everyone slept well except for the Elemental Archmage. Le’Sindo looked protectively at his sister then turned back and while gazing at the star-lit sky thought to himself, “I promised that I would watch over you throughout this Journey my dear Le’Sinta. Jena if you really exist, help me protect my sister.”

A tear trickled down his cheek, and Le’Sindo fell into a deep sleep. As his sister La’Sinta lay dreaming at his side, a strange and mysterious woman greeted her. The woman was dressed in a breathtaking gown. A full-body suit that was pearly-white with ocean-blue trim. She walked up to Le’Sinta and gently ran her hand through Le’Sinta’s long purple hair.

She said, “Your brother has asked me to help you protect you on this long journey.” The woman could tell Le’Sinta was afraid so she calmly said, “I am Jena, Goddess of Atys and Leader of the Karavan. I’m here to help you and the others travel to the distant lands of Atys, and show my love for all races. On all of your armor your people shall place their symbol, and wear it with pride. We shall meet again. Until that time, my followers the Karavan, will help you on your journey. Now sleep young Tryker you need your rest, goodbye.”

When Le’Sinta awoke she turned to the sleeping group, and saw that they all had tears on their cheeks. As she arose, she felt a tear crawl down her own cheek. She started for the camp entrance and stumbled over a bag then crashed to the ground causing everyone to wake up in alarm. Before anyone could say a word the tears rolled down their faces onto their necks and miraculously became necklaces. They looked at each in reverent awe, admiring each other’s necklaces and knew they came from Jena. They were gifts from Jena, to guard and protect the travelers.

They all took a moment of silence to thank Jena for these wonderful gifts. Then Sa’Binga said, “We should go back to sleep. We can rest easy now knowing that Jena is protecting us.” Before they fell asleep they all whispered a gracious thanks to Jena.

[rabcaz]

Lovely words indeed my friend, I am eager to hear more of your tellings..

[legokid]

That first chapter was really a test chapter to see if you will like it.The next chapter will be more detailed.So the next chapter will be The Zorai.Ill post it as soon as possible.